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May 29, 2009
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PENTAX Corporation
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PENTAX K10D
Shutter Speed
1/640 second
Aperture
F/5.0
Focal Length
18 mm
ISO Speed
1600
Date Taken
May 6, 2009, 2:14:47 PM

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Aridax Featured By Owner Jul 2, 2009  Student Digital Artist
Hey there! =D

Sorry about the skimpy critique. Photography, like all art, is really all about personal interest and interpretation, but it lacks certain elements that are easier to critique like technique or accuracy. Also, I don’t have much experience with photography, but I’ll help as much as I can.

Overall, I love the effect that you captured with this image, especially how it fades into the darkness along the edges to emphasize the space and lack of life. Your decision to make the photo black and white also really helped hit your point home where the contrast between dark and light became the contrast between the shadows and the outside—which can lead to a variety of interpretations. The structure of the abandoned building is also interesting, with an angled roof, arched windows and floor tiles as well as the lines of support beams that widen out towards the viewer help with the aforementioned idea of “infinite space”.

There’s just a few little things that bother me, but they aren’t anything major. First are the various items that are strewn across the ground. They do add a bit of interest to the image, but some of the larger ones, like what appears to be a file cabinet or trash bin on the right, are distracting. I don’t know if you meant for the photograph to be like a documentary of sorts, but otherwise, you might want to try arranging the items around to better support your photo. Also, although I like the image as a whole, it lacks that special something to really impress your audience. The brightness of the windows is a nice touch, but the flat whiteness of it is boring. I’m a big fan of light in photography because it adds an extra sparkle to an otherwise normal scene. In the future, try experimenting a little with light and rays, and maybe bringing in a few artificial lights to see what effects you can make.

I hope that helps!
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NoSpI Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Thanks for the detail in the critique :) It's very helpful. This shot wasn't planned at all, i just had my camera with me and saw this room, it was a very spontaneous thing. I'd like to go back and get more there, it's a really interesting room.

Thanks again :) Very helpful feedback.

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Aridax Featured By Owner Jul 5, 2009  Student Digital Artist
I'm glad you found it useful! That makes it all worth it for me. =D

Actually, I have to say that spontaneous photography is some of the best photography. I would usually discourage tampering with your subject before shooting, but these are just some ideas that I thought might be helpful to think about in future shots.

Still, it's a beautiful capture, and it was a pleasure to critique!
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ESRAVEN Featured By Owner May 29, 2009
i thought amy took this picture??
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NoSpI Featured By Owner May 30, 2009  Hobbyist Digital Artist
amy's probably taken heaps like it. i took it a couple of weeks ago for a school assignment but didnt end up using it.
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ESRAVEN Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
OOohh hahaha well awesome! :D
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